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VERSE 1
when you left you took everything
you took my heart, my hope, and my peace
you took the sweet from my sweetest dreams
everything that makes me complete
when you left and i want it all back
i want my hope i want my peace
baby please come lay next to me
and put the sweet back in my dreams
ive come to know  your all i want and need

CHORUS
baby im sorry for how i treated you
and all the pain that i put you through
but all i ask is for one last chance
the man you knew and the man i am
are not the same so please come back to me
and i promise ill give you what you need

VERSE 2
a car and a home with a big back yard
whatever you want consider it yours
kids and a white picket fence
what ever you wish is ill give it
if youll be mine this one last time
all i gotta say is one last and thing

CHORUS
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Author's Comments

first song ive wrote in a while i dont like the 2nd stanza to much and will probably wind up changing it. critique as always is appreciated

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I know you asked for me to give my opinion, but anything I say about a song will not be helpful. This is not my forte. I could just say, "This is good," but that's just ear candy.

So, yeah. Hope you find someone who knows something about songs.

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its all good thanks for trying =)

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